Review: ‘King’s Capture’ (Lyon Dynasty #1) Vivian Wood

Money.

Notoriety.

Violence.

These things go hand in hand with my chosen profession.

My brothers and I are known internationally as lords of war – the most ruthless arms dealers in the world.

Absolutely no one’s safe from us… as long as we are making our next million.

And I only need one person in order to make the ultimate sale.

Persephone is a lovely little raven-haired art forger.

Model-good looks.

Innocent hazel eyes.

Curves that would tempt the devil himself.

She’s going to make a deal with me.

Even if that deal is made after I kidnap her and threaten her life.

My manner with Penny is brusque, brutal, and demanding.

But her body beckons me like a siren’s call.

She’s shell shocked and afraid of what I might do to her.

My only fear is that once I touch her, I may not be able to stop…

I’m a sucker for a Hades/Persephone retelling, so when I saw a blog post about the upcoming release of Vivian Wood’s King’s Capture, the first book in the Lyon Dynasty duet, I promptly pre-ordered it.

Unfortunately, I was pretty disappointed with King’s Capture. It’s not so much a retelling, but more a story about two people who happen to be named Hades and Persephone, the former of whom hails from, erm, the Scottish Highlands. There’s a fleeting scene in which the pair happen to pass a fruit stall selling pomegranates and Hades seems amused when Persephone – who, in the original Greek myth, binds herself to Hades by eating pomegranate seeds – tells him that she likes them. Aside from this – and the fact that she’s been kidnapped by Hades, of course – there isn’t much of the original myth to be found in King’s Capture.

My main issues with King’s Capture were editorial. Mentions of people pushing their cheeks out with their tongues or licking their bottom lips appeared so frequently that it actually distracted me from the story. At one point, people were pushing their cheeks out with their tongues seemingly every other page and I feel like this repetition should have been picked up by an editor. There were also a few continuity errors. At one point, Persephone’s telling Hades about her family and when she tells him that her mother had two children with her father, Hades asks “So that makes ye…a sibling?”. This is despite the fact that he ‘punishes’ her much earlier in the book for emailing her brother while they’re on the run. The fact that she’s a sibling has already been established, but Hades acts as though this is new information. Furthermore, in this same conversation, Hades asks Persephone about her parents, despite the fact they had already had a conversation regarding her parents and their unconventional circumstances earlier in the book. Again, I feel like an editor should have picked up on this repetition.

When Hades brings Persephone to his family home in the Scottish Highlands, he calls a cleaner and tells them that he’s at ‘Blah House’. Later, Persephone refers to the island that the house is on as ‘Blank Island’. Of course, these might be the actual names of these places, but they very much felt like placeholder names that were being used until Vivian Wood came up with their official names. Without meaning to sound like a broken record, I think an editor should have picked up on this.

Hades is supposed to be from the Scottish Highlands, so his dialogue has been written in a Scottish dialect. If I didn’t live in Scotland and didn’t have a very Scottish partner, this probably wouldn’t have been an issue for me, but I felt that it was a bit overdone. He almost felt like a caricature of a Scottish person at times. In a review on Goodreads, one person said that simply stating that he has a Scottish accent would have sufficed and I agree with this.

King’s Capture had potential, but there were too many editorial issues for me to enjoy it, unfortunately.

Want to read King’s Capture? Head on over to Amazon to order your copy.

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